Here, the student has identified a particular type of leadership ("participatory leadership"), narrowing the topic, and has made an arguable claim (this type of leadership is "appropriate" to a specific type of nurse educator).
A good strategy to determine if your thesis statement is too broad (and therefore, not arguable) is to ask yourself, "Would a scholar in my field disagree with this point?
" Here, we can see easily that no scholar is likely to argue that leadership is an unimportant quality in nurse educators.
The student needs to come up with a more arguable claim, and probably a narrower one; remember that a short paper needs a more focused topic than a dissertation.
Better: Roderick's (2009) theory of participatory leadership is particularly appropriate to nurse educators working within the emergency medicine field, where students benefit most from collegial and kinesthetic learning.
In the revised thesis, you can see the student make a specific, debatable claim that has the potential to generate several pages' worth of discussion.
When drafting a thesis statement, think about the questions your thesis statement will generate: What follow-up inquiries might a reader have?
In the first example, there are almost no additional questions implied, but the revised example allows for a good deal more exploration.
If you are having trouble getting started, try using the models below to generate a rough model of a thesis statement!
The Dialogic Teaching is a teaching activity that aims to improve speaking ability of English.
The activity enables students to read and listen dialogues prepared previously on different subjects of English and to practice dialogue based...