Besides, that other essay would go on forever, and, as I mentioned, we read thousands of these things each year.
Whether or not it was intentional, this student started his essay in a way that certainly caught the attention of the admissions committee, and that’s what your first sentences absolutely need to do.
While it is important to talk yourself up as the awesome student you truly are, you still have to remember that the application essay is not a résumé.
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