The candidate uses a wide range of sentence structures, lexical choices and linguistic devices in order to create the imagery of the serenity of a beach.
Throughout the answer there is a good control over adjectives - a few candidates often overload their sentences with complex descriptions that can often weigh-down the sentences and stunt the fluidity, but this candidate remains in control throughout.
Waves are crashing onto land as the distant sun descends like it is sinking into the water. Jack Plows 10SH 2ND Draft Descriptive Coursework ..more.
People laugh and giggle as their day come to an end. A young couple sit up on the cliffs edge watching the sun set. This candidate's response to this Writing to Describe task is a very competent one that uses a number of descriptive techniques in order to convey the strong imagery of a fictional beach. Read full review This candidate's response to this Writing to Describe task is a very competent one that uses a number of descriptive techniques in order to convey the strong imagery of a fictional beach.
The beachgoers spring as their feet hit the blistering sand.
Sitting there for hours, playing with the sand; children giggle as their sand castles are overtaken by powerful crashing waves.
For me, the ocean has always represented escape, new beginnings, adventure.
What things lie on the other side, what wonders does it hold in its deeps?
At high tide, the ocean came right up to the wall and slapped against the stone.
At the wall's end, the land flattened out into a sandbar.